Marrakech is apparently a North African city that many artists such as Mick Jagger and Andy Warhol used to visit in the 60's and 70's. It is filled with the history of our American influencers and has a seemingly rich culture. This article goes on to describe how Yves Saint Laurent (YSL) and this city have corroborated over the years to create a "groundbreaking skin care ingredient."
Things I Might Have Done Differently:
Described the city itself in a little more depth. Tell the reader what the streets are like, what kind of people live there, how the climate and scenery is, etc. Yes, this article is mainly about the YSL skincare product, but it would be nice to envision where this creation is being formed. Since it is apparently a popular city for stars that affect our lives here in America, I found myself wanting to know more about it, and I'm sure there are many other readers who felt the same way.
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